The tree standing tall
near the river bed,
but never ever got a drop
the yellow never turned red.
The wait was eternal
longer than life itself;
there came thousand springs
but soul couldn’t reveal the self.
The leaves were buried
the twigs swept away:
grayed leaves dying underneath
and the river slid silently away.
near the river bed,
but never ever got a drop
the yellow never turned red.
The wait was eternal
longer than life itself;
there came thousand springs
but soul couldn’t reveal the self.
The leaves were buried
the twigs swept away:
grayed leaves dying underneath
and the river slid silently away.
© Amritbir Kaur
24 comments:
Hi Amritbir,
I am happy to have found your site. Literary site by an Indian! Whew. Will follow up. Have bookmarked you.
Found you on blogged.
You have a great site...I'm glad to have stopped by...
You have a great day, sister.
Cyrus
Hi Amritbir,
Very well written. These lines are too good:
"but never ever got a drop
the yellow never turned red.."
What a way to project!
And, thanks for your comments on my blog!
Regards,
Dimple
http://poemshub.blogspot.com
Wow.The poem made me sad.You write so well.Thanks for visiting my blog.
warm regards
this is an awesome creation....
keep writing good....
thanks n regards,
surender chawla
Hi Amritbir, I loved the line, "soul couldn’t reveal the self", you write very well!I am glad I found ur site!Keep up the great work!and do come again!
Hi amritbir, your poem beautifully tells the pain of waiting...makes one feel sad. You write exceedingly well.
Thanks a ton for visiting my blog. I'm glad I found your wonderful site. Following you :-)
Have a nice time!
Glad to see your comments in my blog. Thanks and i appreciate it.
The poem was so touching and the picture was a perfect fit. I could not make out whether the picture inspired the poem or you found a fitting picture for the poem.
Either way, they were complimenting each other. Come up with lot such creations.
Keep posting :)
A wonderful imagination with deep meaning..
we, as human souls,always long for
'a drop'from HIM.Our wait is eternal too.
KAI JANAM BICHHRE THE MADHO,
EH JANAM TUMARE LEKHE..
Thanks Amritbir Kaur ji for sharing such a beautiful creation.
God bless.
very nice poem
Thanks Shruti for your visit and welcome to my blog.
Welcome to my blog Cyrus and thanks for your encouraging feedback.
Hi Dimps, thanks for your word of appreciation. I really cherish them.
Welcome to my blog K.Parthasarathi. Thanks for your inspiring words. Although the poem made you sad, yet it is heartening toknow that the poem had the power to touch your emotions.
Thank you Surender for your appreciative and encouraging comments, and also for sparing your time.
Thanks 'A New Beginning' for paying a visit and also for sharing your valuable thoughts.
Hi Manivannan and welcome to my blog. Thanks for encouraging me with your valuable comment.
Welcome to my blog Avin. I'm glad you found the picture a perfect fit for the poem. I actually searched for the pic after I had written the poem. Thanks for your encouraging words.
Thanks Surjit ji for sharing your valuable views. Your comment along with the quote have provided new insights to my poem.
Thanks Everymatter and I am glad you liked the poem.
Really Nice poem...Life is full of fragnance n flowers, may we treasure each n every hour, some are blessed souls , so they need not measure,for theml ife should always be a Pleasure...!!!
Tree signifies a lot in our life and many great poets have paralleled life with tree. Great thoughts, Amritbir Ji!
you are impressive in expressing your thoughts.......
"too near and too far" that you stressed upon by tree near the river, caries a universal appeal...
gr8 work ...keep it up
mandeep singh
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